Hard40 marksExtended Response
AQA GCSE · Question 05 · Explorations in Creative Reading and Writing
A magazine has asked for contributions for their creative writing section.
Either
Write a description of a very hot place as suggested by this picture:
[A picture showing a vast, dry, cracked-earth landscape under a hazy, orange sky. A bright, white sun hangs in the sky, and distant, hazy mountains are visible on the horizon. The foreground is detailed, showing the texture of the parched ground.]
or
Write a story about a disagreement.
A magazine has asked for contributions for their creative writing section.
Either
Write a description of a very hot place as suggested by this picture:
[A picture showing a vast, dry, cracked-earth landscape under a hazy, orange sky. A bright, white sun hangs in the sky, and distant, hazy mountains are visible on the horizon. The foreground is detailed, showing the texture of the parched ground.]
or
Write a story about a disagreement.
How to approach this question
1. Choose one task: the description or the story.
2. Plan your response. For a description, think about the five senses and how you can structure your writing (e.g., starting with a wide view and zooming in). For a story, plan a simple plot with a beginning, a build-up of tension, a climax, and a resolution.
3. Use a wide range of ambitious vocabulary and varied sentence structures.
4. Employ literary devices like similes, metaphors, and personification to make your writing more engaging.
5. Pay close attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar.
6. Leave time to proofread your work at the end.
Full Answer
(Model answer for the description task)
The air doesn't move. It hangs, thick and heavy like a woollen blanket, saturated with a heat that shimmers above the cracked earth. The ground itself is a mosaic of drought, a jigsaw puzzle of baked mud, the pieces curling at the edges as if begging for a drop of water. To walk on it is to hear a thousand tiny fractures, a brittle crunching underfoot that sounds like the breaking of old bones.
The sun is not a friendly, golden orb; it is a malevolent white eye, glaring from a bleached, hazy sky. Its light is merciless, stripping all colour from the landscape, leaving only shades of ochre, beige, and dust. Shadows are small, sharp things, cowering at the base of the few skeletal shrubs that have somehow survived. They offer no refuge, no hint of coolness.
Silence reigns here, but it is not a peaceful silence. It is a waiting silence, punctuated by the faint, high-pitched hum of insects and the whisper of a hot breeze that feels like the breath from an oven. In the distance, the mountains tremble in the haze, their outlines blurred and uncertain, like a half-forgotten memory. There is no life here, only endurance. It is a world paused at the peak of a fever, waiting for a storm that will never break.
This question assesses your creative writing skills. AO5 focuses on your ability to produce clear and coherent text, matching your tone and style to the purpose and audience. It also assesses your ability to structure your writing and use imaginative vocabulary. AO6 assesses your technical accuracy in spelling, punctuation, and grammar, and your ability to use a variety of sentence forms for effect.
Common mistakes
Common mistakes include writing a story when asked for a description, or vice-versa. Another is failing to plan, leading to a disorganised piece of writing that loses focus. Finally, many students lose marks on technical accuracy by not proofreading their work for simple errors.
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